Writing week 1 term 3

Hello, this week for writing we based it on Hansel and Gretel. We did descriptive writing and we had to descriptive what the cottage looked like and what it smelled like.

Here's my work.

The sour fresh fruity scent lingered through the drift of the breeze, they could almost taste it in their mouth. Hansel and Gretel scurried along the cold damp, dingy, depressing forest. The draft of the freezing mist going into their feet, the tree leaves where as an Autumn that would last forever. They paused. They paused silently. They paused silently and anxiously. They could nailly taste a spicy gingerbread scent, floating through the air and trying to go into their mouths.  They noticed a little cottage in the woods. They could not believe their eyes. A house that you can eat.  They knew they shouldn't touch the sweet crunchy house, They could not resist the sweet salty caramel dripping down from the house. They knew they might possibly get in trouble but they saw some tasty crunchy gingerbread cookies. “I’m terrified this place is creepy” mumbled Greatl. “It’s alright Greatl were all going to be okay”

Sentence stackers 

Hi, this week for Extra writing we watched a video called One man band. I chooses chunk 9 to write about.



Here's my writing.




Tippy was so mad at the Two Musical rivals. She thought there would be no one in the middle of the town square, the men looked at each other like there was a whole war about music fighting to hear who was the best. Her face was so red like a volcano Exploding. She was so mad because the two musicians made her drop a coin on the ground then it rolled away. She pointed at a man's vivaloan but huffaly, the other musician passed the vivaloan over to tippy. Tippy was horrible at first then the  musicians started to laugh at her. Tippy was determined to get it right,  after the 3 times Tippy got it right she did the hardest song ever. Then 5 seconds later she got a whole bag of gold coins. She pulled 3 gold coins out of her bag and showed the two musicians, she told them to come and get the coins. They scurred over and wondered she was actually giving us another chance by giving us some money? Tippy was smiling like an evil villain, When the men got closer she thought the 3 coins behind her, the musicians were not happy but Tippy was.




Here's the video I wrote about.




Link to One man band





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